The mistakes that made KMLM sink

Episodes 16-19

With her question, there is the Midway confrontation of who Murong JingHe really was. Mei Lin wanted to kill him then and there should be a big fight except MRJH could counter her moves (they were his shadow assassins moves, right? Duh) and just when she landed on top of him in their big fight, they overheard Luo Mei. Mei Lin did her signature head movement of "I hear something," LOLOL

MRJH switched positions and I want a REAL KISS here, not the pretend one and Luo Mei reacted angrily as per arc and moved off. Mei Lin BIT Jing He again. She told him to fuck off and stormed off to figure what to do now that she knew the truth. He was the Shadow Assassin Master? Then WTF did he want her to kill himself? 

"I'm not playing your stupid court games!"

Then we have later Jing He being cornered at the cliffside and he fell back and did the standard Chinese drama cliffy.  Of course his Mei Ren could not help herself and ran to dive off with him.

KEEP THE ESCAPE arc. The danger was great. The piss in the pants part was great. His embarrassment and self-torment stirred Mei Lin's compassion. He couldn't walk for real here and it reminded her how helpless he seemed to her when he was an invalid.  Mei Lin struggling dragging him was great. Almost dying in the snow was great. And her guarding him with that blade until rescue was great. This was the stuff of romance-building 101!

THEN....

With that Happy Disney Village arc?

TAKE IT OUT. Out, damn spot!

(more coming what to replace Happy Disney Village ala Lady Gaga's Dark Romance!)

 unbeliebubble:

Your Mei Lin is more sassy and Jing He is darker. I appreciate the push and pull BDSM version. Yours would be more funny and sexy. Thanks for sharing ^^

I am writing the dark Gothic version ala the first five episodes :).  The coming episodes will replace the Disney Village versions after the rescue and I promise this will be dark and sexy as they "fall in love" as per drama rules before the big confrontation with Clown Prince. Hope I'm able to do this right.  LOLOOL

***The Happy Village Episodes Replacement!***

I'm going to write these little scenes at a time because 1) work and 2) more easier to read LOL

*********HappyVillage (Not) Scene 1

Dark screen. Voices heard.

"My Lord!" "Quick, warm him!" "Mei Lin KuNiang, let go of my Lord!" "She won't let go of his hand, what do we do?" "Put them together on the pallet!" "Sir, on top of him?" "Well, do you think she would survive with him on top of her?!"  "Hurry, hurry, hurry!" "Get the Tai Ye!"

First shot. Ravens. Second shot, camera pan back, wide angle. It's MRJH's Shadow Assassin compound. Camera moves. We follow to inner chambers. Camera close up, Jing He's face, eyes opening.

"Mei Lin!"

"My Lord, she's here, beside you."

MRJH turned to look at Mei Lin.

"You've been out for over a day now,  my Lord. She hadn't let go of you all this time."

MRJH looked at their clasped hands. Tried to move his. Her hand tightened. He noticed both of them had half their clothes cut off. (HAHAHA)

"We couldn't freshen both of you up properly, my Lord. (You guys can tell that waking up in fresh couple clothes with their hands still clasped bothered me no end, right? LOL) She would not let go but we tended both your injuries as best we could."

"You dare touch her!"

"No, my Lord. We have a woman from the hidden village come in to take care of that. But it was not easy bandaging one side of her. She's strong and I helped..."

MRJH turned and gave his sidekick a deadly stare.

"I did not look, I did not look! I put on blindfolds and just held on to her other hand tightly while the woman did the rest!" Poor sidekick LOL.  He looked relieved when MRJH just nodded and looked down at the clasped hands again. Whew. Master Assassin MRJH was gonna smite him there for looking at his woman, bwahaha.

"Mei Lin. Let go. We are safe." MRJH said quietly, "You can let go now."

Her hand relaxed and he removed his hand. "All of you leave," he ordered. "Have the village woman come back with clothes and food."

"Yes, my Lord. We'll bring you refreshments." (All dismissed)

MRJH leaned down over the bed. "Wo de Mei Ren, when you wake up and find out who helped to dress up your other wounds, will you bite me again?" He leaned closer., and added, "Se Bu Liao, ye se wo de ren." (You can't die. You're still mine)

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More funny than the actual drama. And what a statement in the end!!!

Ha, thank you. I've been watching Pearl Girl and that took all my attention so have not been writing. Have to take a little break because of the angst right now.

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Happy Village Replacement Scene 2

I would keep the dreaming/talking out loud part while Mei Lin continued her sleep. MRJH was wiping her arms and hands (no idea why, but I guess in C-Dramaland, that's as intimate as one could get) and listening to her talking to her happy mom and dad, then a little bout the fire, then some anguish over her loss, and calling for her mom and dad. Camera close up of JingHe's reaction to each of these emotions.

Mei Lin's last dream sequence was the shadowy face of the Shadow Master and her eyes flew open. Light shone on the features of the person's face and then it cleared and she saw MRJH. She attempted to sit up and was flustered at being already in his arms.

"You're finally awake. Drink something."

It smelt mediciney and she pushed turned her head. "I want..."

"I know what you want. You won't get anything until you drink your medicine and eat something."

She turned back to stare at him. "You don't know what I want." She fisted the bedspread.

MRJH smiled, almost tenderly. "I made you. I know exactly what you want."

Her eyes widened. "MRJH! Who are--"

He put the spoon by her lips. "Drink it. I'll answer one question per swallow."

She looked down at the bowl. She considered pushing and pouring it all over him. She looked back at him. His gaze turned laconic.

"Of course, in your weakened state, I'll just continue dressing your wounds for you. I do like the mole right there, above your--"

Making a sound of frustration, she took a swallow of the medicine. "Who are you?" 

"Who do you think I am?"

"Straight answer! Don't play with me!"

"I'm MRJH, crazy third prince. Also your Shadow Master." He forced another spoonful against her lips. "Curses waste time. Regain your strength and perhaps you could kill me."

She swallowed her 2nd spoonful, staring at him. "You trained me to kill you. No, attempt to kill you. To reopen the investigation because you were going to use my background as an excuse. Why did you poison me?"

He paused with the third spoonful. "It seemed...more humane at the time. If you had done what you were told to do, they would have arrested and torture you. Poisoning would give you a quicker death."

"And the dead doesn't speak," she added bitterly.

MRJH pushed the spoon against her lips. "And yet, here you are. Se Bu Liao. Since you chose to disrupt all my plans, I choose to keep you by my side as my Mei Ren. I'll make you a deal. I'll look for the real antidote to the poison if you work with me against my brother."

Mei Lin continued drinking the medicine. "I'm healed enough. I don't need you."

"You saved me. I, MRJH, will save you," he told her. "You've trained long and hard. Your hatred for me saw you through the worst of times. Yet, you chose to save me during the hunt. Why?"

Mei Lin just stared at him. She had no answer. MRJH smiled again. "Drink the rest of the medicine and I'll tell you why."

Curiosity got the better of her and she did so. "Why?" she asked, a little fascinated by this man. How mad was he to have planned all that?

He leaned ever so much closer. "Because you have to make a choice. Kill me. Or love me." He put a finger to her open lips, shushing her surprise. "Kill me, love me, it doesn't matter now. Here is the truth. You and I have to avenge 100,000 lives and 13000 Wei Bei troops. I'll find the cure to your poison."

"And then what?" she whispered. She felt lost, unsure of anything at the moment. Too much information to processed and not strong enough...yet. "You're very killable, but not very lovable." (Sha le ni hen rongyi. Ai le ni shi yi ji ku yao.) (killing you is easy, loving you is bitter medicine)

MRJH barked out that odd mad laughter of his. "Fate makes things interesting," he declared, putting down the empty bowl. He stood up. "Someone will help you freshen up. When you're feeling stronger, we'll talk more."

"As Master and assassin?" she countered bitterly. "or as Lord and Mei Ren?"

His lips quirked. "I haven't decided."

He swept out of the room. Mei Lin stared after him. Licking her lips, she said to herself, "Definitely going to kill him." She frowned, licked her lips again, "Ugh. My god, I can taste the damn medicine."

 unbeliebubble:

I understand, I heard this is a good show. I am procrastinating. I am all ears on "Fangs of Fortune" now. This one will follow. 

I like the sassiness and the seductive push and pull you added. In the drama Mei Lin was too shy to play like this. 

Well, if um going dark and gothic, I’m going all 32 episodes, dammit! 😆

 unbeliebubble:

You'll finish before me. I managed to go to episode 6 as of for now. 

And you’re doing great job! I haven’t read all of it yet. 

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She told him so. This could have made a very cute interaction between them. 

Yes, this bothered me. I'm including this in their "growth" scenes here in the "Not Happy Village Reenactment."  LOL. Writing the third scene right now.